Your main ideas are not off topic at all. You’ve organised your ideas and paragraphs very well. But some of your supporting points might less focused. For example, in your first body paragraph you are absolutely right to write about children becoming self absorbed which could continue into their adult life. This is relevant because the essay question is about a society of individuals. But your point about parents not being able to control them is not on topic – this is not about parental control, it’s about selfishness. Even with minor points lacking a bit of focus, it is still possible to hit band 7 in Task Response.
There are only two statements needed for the introduction in writing task 2: . See all tips and lessons on this page; . Please get my advanced lessons as they explain in great depth exactly how to write an IELTS essay:
Your videos and lessons have been incredibly helpful. Many thanks!! I even recommended it to a few friends who also shared the same sentiments.
I am re-sitting my IELTS this Saturday, as I obtained a low score in reading in my test with 5.5. I desperately need a 6.5 to achieve a University requirement. I guess I under-estimated the reading section and spent more time studying the S, L and W, which clearly showed. Not impressed! My only challenge with the reading part is the T,F, NG/Y,N, NG – I’m improving but still not 100% there yet. I have one day to go…..Any advise would be much appreciated.
My IELTS Academic exam is scheduled to be held on August 1. This would be my third attempt for the same and every time I score less in writing(6.5) and my requirement is 7 in each module. The rest of the modules I have managed to score more than 7. Could you please guide me so that I can crack the test this time. Also, kindly let me know if there is any way so that I can email my writings to you for evaluation. Please help.
Remember, it’s okayto write more than 5 paragraphs!
I don’t know what I can suggest. You need to look at the method used for each type of essay question by reviewing my models. You need to look at the essay structure, linking, and length of each paragraph. Try to find where your weakness is.
All the best
Do I need to divide my essay body into paragraphs?
Through most of the post I’ve been, what i didn’t find is how to answer the question when the topic is contradictory for myself?
For example the topic in first comment about Whether to let children decide on their own or not. What if I’ve opinions in both context what shall I really do?
Should I go through only one perspective or can I mention multiple views on same topic.
Is it advisable to have 2-3 body paragraphs or 4-5 body paragraphs?
If you haven’t had training in presenting a partial agreement, then it’s better to choose one side. Making a mistake with the way you present your opinion could seriously affect your score. For this reason, my advanced lessons about opinion essays is 1 hour long – this is the only way to avoid such complications:
Five Paragraph Essay Outline. A 5 paragraph essay outline is the blueprint that aids teachers in directing and teaching students on how to accomplish 5 paragraph essays.If several of your paragraphs are exceedingly short (4-5 lines), it is likely that you are not developing your ideas thoroughly enough--that you are writing notes rather than analysis. Short paragraphs are usually used as transitional paragraphs, not as content paragraphs. (Short paragraphs can be used in the rhetorical devise of reversal where you lead your reader down a certain path (to show them one side of the argument, the one you are going to oppose) and then turn away from that argument to state the true argument of your paper.)
5 Paragraph Essay Outline, Outline for 5 Paragraph EssayHello, Liz and everyone who follows this awesome blog. I have a question which is really important to be answered, either by Liz or anyone who can offer me some help.
Yesterday I wrote an essay on the following topic:
“Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals that only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions on matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion”.